Oh yes,that scene is lovely, yes it is.
I don’t know if this is your experience as well friends, but there are times when I write a scene in my handy-dandy Moleskin and it’s… well, for lack of a better word, kind of meh.
It hits all the points it was supposed to, sure, and might even have some nice dialogue in it, but there’s nothing memorable in it. Nothing that makes you want to turn the page if you know what I mean.
I find that when I am transcribing from notebook to laptop I create much more visual and packaged scenes. The kind of scenes that not only paint a picture but frame it, hang it on the wall and get bid on in an auction.
That was what happened this morning in my first all-important scene between Portia and Dr. Olsen – my magical laptop took it to the next level, and if my readers are not asking themselves ‘Holy crap, I wonder what Portia is going to do with THAT?’ at the end of it, I’ll eat my Moleskin. Or a new moleskin (not the one I’ve written in ’cause that’s just crazy-talk).